As we scattered on to the pirate ship I felt lots and lots of butterflies inside my stomach. I thought I was going to tumble off my seat and break a bone, I could hear people distracting other people while they were crying.
Wait a minute SNAP! The ride suddenly started giving my heart a terrible fright I went up then I went down then higher and then lower it was like I was on bungee jump my lips were dragging back like they wanted to kiss my ears, I nearly fall off my seat, my tears were dripping down my cheeks like a dripping tap that Can’t turn off.
I cried slightly and scrubbed off my tears. It felt like it was the end of the world, my mouth felt like it flied off. I kicked my legs violently. I waited patiently for someone to say something. Suddenly my brother said something that I didn’t understand, I smiled excitedly to him. I could only see that the sun had disappeared behind the trees while the ship kept on swinging the pirate ship went really high and I knew what was happening next the pirate ship droped down like someone falling from a building the pirate ship slowed down and got even slower and then I stand up and it stopped.
HI ITS ME SHARNA AGAIN
ReplyDeleteI REALLY LIKE YOUR STORY ALOT.SOME OF THE THINGS THAT YOU NEED TO WORK ON IS PUTTING MORE METAPHORS AND SIMILES.
Lots of interesting words here!
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