Giffney Personal Writing

I waited nervously. Bang! There goes the gun. Everybody runs except for me then I sprinted off and rushed up to them like cheetahs. The crowd was roaring like lions and also my calf muscles felt as hard as an elephant knee. When the gun shot it sounded deadly. Then at the end I thought I was going to suffocate. But then I finally got into the finals. Then in the finals my whole family was proud of me when I sprinted like a cheetah. As I came through the finish line it felt like an eagle was looking at me like I was it’s pray. Also everybody said you came first Giffney you came first.

Tyra Personal Writing

Yah we are moving house finally. I was so happy that I could only think about that. We were putting our stuff in the truck and our aunties and uncles came to help us. Then we locked up the truck and travelled all the way over the harbour bride and back into otara. It was a long ride. As we arrived at our new house my heart was pumping with excitement. And I couldn’t wait for the door to open. I herd the rustling of the keys my mum was going to open the door. And there it was our new house. I rushed to my bedroom with lots of joy. I was screaming like a monkey down and up the hallway. They suddenly locked the truck and drove of we were waving and saying bye.  Our cousins were sleeping over at our house. We were having a movie night and I was having lots of fun. I’m so glad we moved back to Otara.

Teretere Personal Writing

As my cousins and I waited for the rest of our family my parents, aunty and uncles were looking on the map. At first they looked so confused like a person that does know anything. But then they started getting the hand of it. my cousins  and I were crazy clowns bursting with joy. Then the rest of our family comes . Finally! My cousins say to me like an animal that can not think. they where getting in the car whit all of our stuff in to the car of to the Beach as we jumped in the car to go to the beach for a swim be for sun down. We all got in 2 cars to get to the amaze beach we left home driving and driving  . It only tack us 5mins to get there we all came to a stop I look out I saw the beach  I loop out with examine I bossed with joy I could wait an till I get in the cold beach then I got out my Board   we  stayed there for 1 hour I got in the beach it was cold my body felt like I was in ice world then we hade some nice lunch then we hade a brake it was nearly sundown my family and I went home because it was getting cold my family and I went home because we were tired when we got home I whet for a shower then I went to bed. But then my mum said go to sleep I said ok then she went out then I said “Not” but it was a really nice time there.

Hayley Personal Writing

As my family and I went to One Tree Hill Park to play, my nephew nieces and I strolled to the flying fox, As we hopped like frogs into the line with other people we were all delighted to be having a turn on the flying fox. When it was my turn I felt so scared that I wanted to gallop like a horse back to the car and hide but I didn’t, I believed in myself I said  “I can do this.” Suddenly off I go speeding down the long path over the grass then bang again I say again but sadly the line got even bigger and I didn’t want to wait for a long time, so after my nephew and niece’s got off it was time to go I was so gutted that we were leaving so As my sister says that were going I said  goodbye in a sad way “goodbye flying fox see you again next time”

Hannah Personal Writing

One morning my Dad asked me a question. He said would you like to join any kind of sports and I said I would like basketball and he said that’s great Hannah. I whisper quietly to my mum “I like basketball because it has 3 silible in it. I felt a ghost pinch me and then gave me a another idea. “Perhaps soccer” I said to my dad. One evening my family said that we were going to the warehouse but when we got there I told my brother this doesn’t look like the warehouse. My brother said “I know” “I knew they were up to something”! Yesterday my sneaky Dad went to go and signed me up to play soccer with my little cousin. I was quite nervous because I didn’t really know many people in the team. The only person I knew was my cousin. The coach was teaching under 7’s and telling them all the rules. But I was 8 years old. Then my Dad had to tell the coach that I was 8 years old but the coach didn’t mind. So he said that we had to get in a long line. We had to dribbling around the cone’s two times and after that the coach was teaching us how to kick the ball and get it in the goal. Finally it was my turn the coach kicked the ball hardly to me and said “Good luck” I felt water rushing down my face but then I kicked the ball and it dashed throw the air and then it made a sound and it went like this Whoosh!!!  The ball curved around the cone and got the ball straight into the goal. I shouted YAY! The coach was surprised. So he walked me to the car and said don’t forget to came to the game on Saturday then “I just said ok” and then he closed the door. While we were driving back home my dad said “Good on you Hannah” But I said “I’m not going”. My dad says but you told the coach that you would be there. No I just wanted him to go away.

David's Personal Writing

I knew this day would come the day of Miss Wills leaving the best piano player and also the best teacher in the whole school.

This day came too fast, just when this year was getting bitter and bitter, I was hoping that this day would never end. As we made our way to the hall to wish Mrs Wills goodbye, I was thinking how would the day end with Mrs Wills leaving .When we got in the hall and seattal down all of the seniors were practices singing to Mrs Wills , as Miss Wills made her way in side the seniors were surprise to see her.

As Mrs Wills sat down and got ready, the whole senior school started singing what we practices for the last few minute .This will be Miss Wills last time hearing us sing, and also the last assembly she will have with the whole senior school

When I saw Mrs Wills on her thrown, she was as beautiful as a rose. As soon as we got back to class the whole class was surprise to see her.

 As the end of school came every body have a big goodbye hug as I walked off ,I took one good glimpse of Mrs Wills and walk off.

Christian Personal Writing

This is fabulous .When I found out I made it to the team I was so happy everyone that made it was jumping around like a monkey getting a banana. So the first training we went on the hill looked like a teeny tiny hill but riding down was terrifying. There were cars coming past just about a meter away from were we ended.

 But at the end of the training we all had fun and we all wanted to come back. After a couple of times training at the same place Mrs. Macaree said lets take it to the gardens so off we went. When I saw it my eyes shrank my skin had lumps my jaw dropped my fears were overcoming everything inside me it felt like something was stabbing my brain the butterfly were going bananas. Then Bam! Before I knew it was the big day. Whoa all those cars looked flash then gulp I felt something traveling down my throat. Then it was my turn. 3, 2, 1 they said then zoom! off we went down the lane as I was driving down I remembered what Mrs.  Macaree said face down and countertrade on the race   Then I lost the race but I had the fastest time then in felt sad but Mrs Macaree said the fastest time is better than winning the race. Then wait  Mrs Macaree said I think it time to choose then I said “choose what” “the teams that made it Mrs Macaree then I could not believe what the announcer said  I didn’t make it but at least I had fun. 

Afu Personal Writing

On Friday  me and my friends were so excited that our first game has come. I was so eager that I was in the team but first we were getting ready to go. First we had to have a little play. Then to go and line up to do the roll then our coach comes to get us ready to go. Then he came and got us we were getting on the bus. Then off we go. When we were on the bus me and my friends were talking until we got to winedmonly because we had to share the bus with them because they had no bus to go to Rugby. When they walked inside. We all went silent then every one went crazy. But me. That’s when I got scared so I said to my self what have I let myself in for Because it is my first time in the team but still I was scared that I was going to get injured but I was not happy that I’m in the team because my mum takings that I was going to get injured but I did not. When I got there my face went red and blue because I was scared that I might get in purist but I was not. So after the man was finished talking we went and had our first game. We got a draw because no one got a try so in the end we lost 3 and won 2. So we came 4^th we had to go back to school but no we came 3^rd we was so happy because we came 3^rd and we all said we are in the finals.

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Sharna's Story

The strap was holding on to me tightly. It felt like something was pushing me back. Like something didn’t want me to fall. My dad and I were bursting with laughter waiting for the ride to start.

The ride blasted like a rocket getting ready to depart to space. It twisted and twirled like a gymnast flipping and hand springing. I looked over to my dad all I could see was the G-force pulling his skin back and his hair coming towards his face. My eyes felt like they were going to collapse to the ground. And I thought the ride was going to crash-land. Me and my dad were so high we were like crazy eagles stalking its prey. Suddenly the ride was spinning so fast like it was out of control all I could see was colours floating everywhere. Then suddenly my hair decided to float in mid air because of how I was hanging upside down.

As time was going on the ride came to a slow stop. I felt so disappointed that I couldn’t say a word but just look annoyed and crossed because the ride had instantly stopped. Then I slowly hopped off the ride staring at it for ages. Then I thought to myself im going to miss you … not.

Kurtis Story - The Superman Ride

The moment I started on the rollercoaster I was shaking I had 10,000 buterflies in my tummy then the man came along and told us the rules. And we got straped in my cousin was nervis. sundenly the man pulled the leaver and whosh!!! We went and me and my cousin where screaming monkeys.

Then it went around and up and down so much You could only see blur and then I saw loop then I collapsed in to pieces! I nearly fanted then we went on the loop. It was terrifying I wanted to pee my pants. It was like we where on a speed train sharp shooting corners and then we where slowing down and sundely it stoped me and my cousin. Were waiting patiently. My pams where getting sweaty then it droped and we where screaming and then the ride went up the hill in a slow motion way and then all of a sudden it stop and the ride was over.

I wanted to go on it again my tummy felt like a sowed had been through it. Me and my cousin said” shell we go on it again yes we should not go on it again said my cousin.

Joey's Story - The Haunted Text

As we parked in the dusty broken drive way a man swore at us from miles away. The driver next to us forced her car to move faster than a wormhole crushing stars with a strange and worried frown on her face the car drifted into a blurry sight. My mother ignored him but I the man’s voice grow louder and louder. I was terrified. But I ignored him.


He was more drunk than I expected! I thought. He probably thinks it’s his turf which was rubbish, because I know that is wasn’t. As he got closer he almost smashed our car with one of his empty glass bottles it was terrifying to watch and I was crying underneath my glasses until almost everything was as blurred as it could possibly be he continued with the horrible and painful words, it was like being trapped in a car with a zombie banging constantly on the front of your car, a haunted text is what it was.

When he tried to open our car door my mum locked them as quickly as she and for luck he was still trapped outside. As we drove away I felt like I could run him over if I was driving the car but I wasn’t but he still deserves it wouldn’t you agree? Any way going back to the story…

When we parked somewhere safer I felt calmer but was still terrified my body was shivering as if it was below negative one decrease and as for my heart, well let’s just say it was beating faster than you think I don’t know any other way to describe it.
I’ll never forget that haunted memory, but on the bright side we still look over that story, and right now its kendo funny thinking about it, in fact we tell our family members about it all the time.

Hayley's Story - The Ride

As the strap was holding on to me tightly, it felt like something was pushing me back like I couldn’t breath. The ride blasted like a rocket my hands were getting sweating and my eyes were slowly closing, I could hear my nephew saying” mummy” it was funny I was scared and happy at the same time. The ride was spinning; My heart was beating so fast that it felt like there was a cheetah inside my body. Suddenly the ride was coming to a stop, I was so disappointed and that I couldn’t even say another word. As I bounced off I felt so happy, and that I wanted to go back on but I didn’t want to suffer all those things again. As we walk away I say” goodbye I might come back” but I don’t think so.

David's story - The Ride

We were all buckle up. The man said hold on tight but I didn’t. Sins we went up my heart stop pumping, I was half scared and half terrified. I wanted to jump off this crazy ride but it was too late we were already 50 feet off the ground, as I look around all of the people looked like ant.


It was far out cold, it was cold as Pluto. Suddenly I was getting butterflies. As soon as we touch the top I was be on nervous, then WHOOSH!!! We all wanted to yell as crazy as monkey but this ride took away our breath.

The butterflies were growing in my stomach, more than100,000 butterflies in my stomach, my heart was beating as fast as a car, I felt like I was going to fly off this crazy ride. Finally when we were 20 feet high the ride stopped in a flash. BANG!!! As soon as the ride stop I bang my chin on the seat , but the pain didn’t bother me the ride totily shocked me that I did not feel a thing.

As where making our way down slowly, my moth was half open and my heart is beating slowly, but I was steal in shocked as that was the last ride I am riding. Finally I was on the ground, I wasn’t surprise to here my cousin saying can we go again, keep on dreaming I said loudly.

Zhanise's Story - The Pirate Ship

As we scattered on to the pirate ship I felt lots and lots of butterflies inside my stomach. I thought I was going to tumble off my seat and break a bone, I could hear people distracting other people while they were crying.


Wait a minute SNAP! The ride suddenly started giving my heart a terrible fright I went up then I went down then higher and then lower it was like I was on bungee jump my lips were dragging back like they wanted to kiss my ears, I nearly fall off my seat, my tears were dripping down my cheeks like a dripping tap that Can’t turn off.

I cried slightly and scrubbed off my tears. It felt like it was the end of the world, my mouth felt like it flied off. I kicked my legs violently. I waited patiently for someone to say something. Suddenly my brother said something that I didn’t understand, I smiled excitedly to him. I could only see that the sun had disappeared behind the trees while the ship kept on swinging the pirate ship went really high and I knew what was happening next the pirate ship droped down like someone falling from a building the pirate ship slowed down and got even slower and then I stand up and it stopped.

Anireia' story - The Rollercoaster

I darted up the high giant steps it was so high that I couldn’t look down. ’’I made it’’ I shouted. I leaped into the seat like a kangaroo. The silver handles came down it was tight on my stomach like a sodden though my body.

The ride started to move. We when upward slowly. WHOOSH! We went down fast like we were racing a cheetah. We crash into corners like we were in a car crash. We went upside down like a bat sleeping.
I could hear my cousin screaming and I could see people’s hair in my face. “Oh no we are going down” I said exitcly. I felt 4000 butterflies calmly flying in my stomach.

Finally we came to a stop. I bounce out of the seat like a frog. I was so dizzy that my cousin haved to take me downs the steps. I wish I could go on you again “not”.

Personal Experience Writing

This term we have been focusing on personal experience writing. The children have written stories from their own experience and are attempting to write so that the reader feels like he or she is in the centre of the action. They do this by using feelings, thoughts and emotions. They use similies and metaphors to describe things that happen and attempt to use descriptive language as much as possible. What do you think?

The First Post!

This is our first post on our blog. The children decided to do create a news show similar to the ones we had seen on other blogs. The children had a short time to decide on their news item, script it and film it. What did they do well and what can they improve?