The strap was holding on to me tightly. It felt like something was pushing me back. Like something didn’t want me to fall. My dad and I were bursting with laughter waiting for the ride to start.
The ride blasted like a rocket getting ready to depart to space. It twisted and twirled like a gymnast flipping and hand springing. I looked over to my dad all I could see was the G-force pulling his skin back and his hair coming towards his face. My eyes felt like they were going to collapse to the ground. And I thought the ride was going to crash-land. Me and my dad were so high we were like crazy eagles stalking its prey. Suddenly the ride was spinning so fast like it was out of control all I could see was colours floating everywhere. Then suddenly my hair decided to float in mid air because of how I was hanging upside down.
As time was going on the ride came to a slow stop. I felt so disappointed that I couldn’t say a word but just look annoyed and crossed because the ride had instantly stopped. Then I slowly hopped off the ride staring at it for ages. Then I thought to myself im going to miss you … not.
Hi its me Sharna
ReplyDeleteI think that i have done a great job on this.But i think the things that i need to work on is putting more feelings into my storys.
Hi its me Hayleeh
ReplyDeletewow sharna i think that you did a great work but you just need to have more smiles
from Hayleeh
hey sharna its joey.
ReplyDeleteI think your storys great but the similes are too close together.